The Relapse

In that dire moment of distress
When the spirit craves for breath
Thou shall see my mistress!
How thy chosen man shall save ye not
From de agony of tormenting death

The hell's hatchway paves a welcome
To efface the sins that thee doest
Ye shall ken with hell's twinge so gruesome
De man's love who blesseth thee with de knot
Could burn not as the brightest

Love bereft, de soul of thine shall regret
Union with de man, whose love so futile
For, what hath thy love for de man beget?
A Love whose arms could reach not beyond death
That which shall forsake thee in hell's exile

The hell's fire shall burn not thy soul
Oh dear !! Inspite of de sins of thee
The angel of death shall grant thou a parole
For, de juvenile's love who thou hath once loved
Shall bear all thy hardship and set ye free !!

PS: The above lines describe the pre death and post death happenings in the life of a married woman. She suffers a painful death and goes to hell realizing that the materialistic love that she had shared with her husband on earth was totally worthless. In exchange for her love to him, she had gained nothing in return except for her share of the sins done together as a family. In hell, she understands that his love for her was just a selfish give and take relation totally insignifcant beyond death. Inspite of the sins she had done, she sees that she is set free from hell by the angel of death upon learning the fact that the lad whom she once loved in her youth would bear all the sins for her. His love and prayers for her all through the years until her death would save her from living an eternity in hell.

16 Responses so far.

  1. I totally love this..!! Archiac language..!!

  2. Arey, I'm so poor at this that I couldn't get anything till I read the gist! lol

    @Pooja.. Did you mean "Archaic"?

  3. Vamsi says:

    @Pooh Thanks pooo :)

    @Rahul Hahaha. If I was a reader to my blog, may be even I wouldn't have understood :D hehe. Anyways, yes, poo meant it to be archaic :)

    @Ashutosh Thanks bro. ;)

  4. nikhil says:

    mohan!! out of this world. Fervor of nascent love was writ large in this poem. A phenomenal poetic work. Now I see the genuine poet in you. Very well written.

  5. Wonderful poetry Vamsi! Your poetic skills have surely advanced to the next level..Loved it!:)

  6. dev says:

    Frankly, looking at ur talent in writing makes me jealous! =P
    great post by the way... loved it!!

  7. Vamsi says:

    @Nikhil, divya Thanks :)

    @Dev Thanks for the compliment dev! BUt I am not that talented. If there is something in my writing, that is just an outcome of the increasing number of posts on my blog. That's it :) You start writing some stuff and eventually you will end up being better than me :)

  8. wow..!!
    i'm speechless !
    awesome job ! :)

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  10. vamsi says:

    @dm Deeee.. thank you Thank you thank you :)

    @Innocence_apart Thanks for dropping by !!

  11. Nethra says:

    Phew! I do not understand this style of english. :( It's just not my cup of tea. Thanks for the explanation in the end otherwise I wouldn't have understood much of it!
    Anyway, you have written something using the old style and that calls for some real appreciation.

  12. sushruth says:

    I spent some quality time after ages..! thanks for your blogs..!

  13. vineet says:

    firsy of all thnks to the PS part,whole poem felt like an unseen passsage with lot many Qs that i wont b abl to answer later on :P bt must say, aftr d 2nd look, felt the gravity...:)

  14. vamsi says:

    @Nethra hehe. Thanks :)

    @Susu Katthi compliment ichav!! thanks ra :D

    @Vineet I usually keep my blog posts very simple. This one is actually not a conventional post of mine :)

  15. Kudos! For having used this style.. and for the fact, that I understood only half of it before I read the P.S... :P .. Frankly, your hold over the language is superb! Not many use this style currently. Do I see a young Shakespeare budding? :)

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